It looks good. I get the story. The effects are pretty effective and the animation smooth. Visually, there's not much to complain about. That being said, I'd tackle the dialogue editing a little harder, maybe fix up the font a bit. The rest of the music video is good enough that the poor grammar, troubled spelling, and disconcerting font take away from the overall effect. This was a solid video, nonetheless, that I enjoyed seeing.
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