The video just felt a little too even-keeled for me. The voice acting could have been kicked up a notch or maybe the dialogue a little tuned. Like I said, the idea for the video is solid, but the execution could use some refinement. I'd definitely recommend experimenting with character voices, since that could go a long way toward promoting a better sense of production.
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