The rough edges are a little tougher to sort out. I sometimes struggled to figure out who was speaking and to whom each piece of dialogue belonged. Also, I stumbled over a couple of typos, though I don't know how much of that was for effect versus just plain accident.
Ultimately, Blood Sisters is a strong start in the field of narrative machinima, so I hope to see Miss Septula do more. The biggest thing would be to tackle clearer attribution in that dialogue.
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