The voice acting could use some tightening up and the pace kicked up a little faster. There are a few awkward pauses played for laughs, but I wasn't certain it was a purposeful awkward pause or just an honest-to-Elune awkward pause. Still, that kind of feedback is almost universal; faster pace, tighter soundtrack. The same could be said for nearly every movie ever made, so Griffter's on the right track.
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