The voice acting is much stronger. It sounded like a couple of folks might have a plastic cup over their microphones or something, but the higher voltage voice acting definitely improves the video. I'd take a look at how you frame group shots, though. While I get why you cut from character to character, it'd help to have an establishing shot of the group standing together.
And before the comments explode, I'm assuming it's If WoW Was Real and not If WoW Were Real on purpose, all right? And besides, you know what they say about getting into grammar fights on the internet.
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